Script Changes

I wasn't quite satisfied with the script, I felt like it lacked something, and it felt more like a short story than a film opening. So I decided to add in some scenes and change the tone of the opening a little. I'm thinking of maybe adding a voiceover and taking it into more of a coming-of-age, slice-of-life direction rather than a very slow and artistic film opening. So here are the changes I've made:

Essentially I wanted to better convey to the viewer that the story goes on even after the two minutes of the film opening, and I plan to use the voiceover as a tool to give the audience a better understanding of what's happening and what the character is doing. The first scene in the cemetery will act as a flash-forward, the voiceover then explaining that the following scenes are the beginning of the journey that led the character to the cemetery in the first place. There's a chance I've included too many shots in the script and that I'll have to cut some of them, but I'll decided that later, when I finish filming and start editing.